So we finally got to show our films to the class. After we had done this we all watched it again and gave some feedback. The video below will be our film and also comments from the class, we had to shout out stop and then the teacher would pause the film. We then had a chance to comment on what we thought needed improving. This feedback would help us to re-do parts of the film.
Firstly the class mentioned that our foot steps were out of time, to change this we will slow down the footsteps in final cut or use different ones to make sure they fit and work better. As well as that we got feedback saying that they pan was taken of the subject which we was trying to show, to cage this we will either re-film it or cut it and change the shot completely.
Secondly they picked out that the shot of Dom at the door was uneven and caused didn't show the full shot, also there is a reflection on the wall from pour clapper board that shouldn't be there this also got picked out by the class. They also picked out the fact that our actor was standing at the door for way to long and it went on for to long.
Thirdly when the girlfriend opened the door she didn't greet him in a very good manner they should have maybe hugged or at least den something that shows their relationship. Also we needed to add a sound effect on the door as it is closing. As well as that the music stops very quickly in the scene this is not professional and makes the film look worse.
The actors look at their phone this is very obvious and is showed to the audience. We need voice overs to make this better and to show that it is clearly a relationship not a friendship. The acting doesn't show that they are in a relationship.
You cannot tell that they are boyfriend and girlfriend this is a serious issue in our film, the acting should have been more structured by us to show this better. It is very staged.
The shot was very low this was because we didn't want to cut the head off the actors but it also gives off the wrong opinion to the audience. The dialogue needs to be much more convincing as they don't come across as they care about what is happening. This is a error by us because we didn't give them clear instructions.
We needed more sound effects for when they are walking around the house. The editing cut of grace going up the star is was a b it off they was way to obvious to the audeince. We need to make the story line much more obvious to the audience. The shots were rushed and made the film looked rushed.
